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    Quote from Christoph Lühr on April 5, 2014, 08:42
    Hi there,

    do not have the time to read through the whole guide and find mistakes, but I have a small Issue with the pdf.

    Through the unusual format, it is not possible to scale it for a Tablet. The pages are either to high or to broad for my tab.

    I don’t know if it will be possible to change this in the final PDFs ?

    This is why I like the pdf reader EBookDroid. If you set your View Mode to Horizontal scroll if will do true scrolling left to right so that the tablet doesn’t have to reduce down the size of the page to show the whole thing at once, and will expand out the vertical display to cover the whole screen.

    Give it a go!

    #7408
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    VOLUME 1

    Page 150
    – The fierce Storm-worshiping barbarians and Pent nomads remain the implacable enemies of the pantheon.

    Page 151
    – In the earliest times, people lived close to the Creator, but subsequent generations found power and faith from the insidious temptations of the gods.

    Page 153
    – However, it still lurks in the hinterlands, and can now never be completely expelled.

    Page 156
    – Therefore, any Heroquest will always bring surprises, unexpected challenges, unforeseen dangers, and undreamt of perils and opportunities.

    Page 158
    – However, magic is everywhere and all objects, events, and phenomena have a mythic rather than a scientific cause or explanation.

    Page 159
    – Its mist-shrouded harbor upon Sramak’s River is visited by wandering demigods and celestial beings and is almost beyond reach the reach of mortals.

    Page 160
    – It is generally recognized that four Otherworlds co-exist with the mortal world: the Essential World, the God World, the Spirit World, and the Underworld.
    – These strange spirits are often unknown and even unknowable to the denizens, without personality, shape, or even a clear purpose of being.

    Page 168
    Lunar sorcerers and soldiers: Behind Fazzur and the Feathered Horse Queen are ranks of Lunar sorcerers and Provincial Lunar soldiers. [paragraph opening should be bolded]

    Page 174
    – In 1520, he assembled his family, many priests, and most loyal followers

    Page 179
    – Their grandson, Yarandros the Charge-Crazy (ruled 1395-1440), was the first king to expand the borders of Tarsh

    Page 185
    – The persistently-repeated prophecy of the coming Red Moon proved correct
    – At the north end of the range lies Sentry Mountain, where stands a 400-foot-tall statue of Karrg

    Page 193
    – It remained in ruin until 1580, when rebuilding began under the direction of the great-grandfather to Skilfil Heartpiercer, the current ruler.

    Page 197
    – Balazar: A rugged and thinly-populated expanse of land

    RICK SEZ: Fixed.

    #7416
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    Page 696. Tall Green Forest in the text but Tallgreen Forest on the Mythic Map page 695

    RICK SEZ: Fixed text.

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    VOLUME 1

    Page 211
    – Common Events No unusual event. [spaced improperly]

    Page 222
    – The Three Weapons of Talor are a two-handed sword, an axe, and a flail.

    Page 224
    – Ayos (large city): This heavily-fortified city in the Syanor lowlands

    Page 232
    – Tastolar: This thinly-forested land is the home of the Uncolings (Reindeer People).

    Page 237
    – The caverns are so large that a city could dwell there, if they could be fed. [‘vast’ used in previous sentence]

    Page 239
    – In 1336, Belintar “used up” his body the first time and the first of the Tournaments of the Masters of Luck and Death was held [or, “the first Tournament of the Masters of Luck and Death”]
    – This deed was the Opening of the Seas, lifting the 650-year-old curse on oceanic sailing.

    Page 244
    – Esrolia is a densely-populated nation which occupies the northwestern portion of the Holy Country

    Page 250
    – King Broyan confronts the newly-enthroned Queen Samastina
    Esrolian Grandmother: The queen is advised by her grandmother [needs to be bolded]
    – elaborately decorated with gold, silver, and gems

    RICK SEZ: Fixed.

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    Page 531. Arashgoy: not in alphabetical order

    RICK SEZ: Fixed.

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    Index Comments

    Heading ‘Symbols’ might be Numerals?

    These entries suggest a variation in naming in the text which may require modification, and/or might be combined in the Index:

    Shanassee tree 187, 454
    Shanassee Trees 62, 388

    Prince’s Green 321
    Prince’s Green of Jillaro 321
    Jillaro-of-the-Prince’s Green 321

    (One instance has a capital letter)
    henotheist 53, 216, 247, 350, 379, 383, 627
    Henotheist 51, 151
    henotheists 638

    Gods Time 97
    God Time 27, 36, 41, 43, 53, 55, 65, 66, 80, 87, 90, 91, 98, 109, 111, 114, 120, 125, 150, 151, 156, 160, 162, 171, 182, 185, 188, 189, 193, 198, 205, 206, 211, 215, 244, 249, 262, 272, 274, 279, 281, 284, 286, 292, 295, 316, 317, 318, 321, 335, 342, 348, 349, 357, 362, 376, 395, 424, 425, 426, 427, 431, 432, 433, 437, 444, 445, 449, 451, 454, 455, 456, 457, 463, 486, 490, 496, 497, 515, 516, 525, 528, 537, 540, 557, 564, 570, 575, 580, 586, 587, 588, 593, 594, 595, 608, 613, 619, 640, 641, 645, 646, 659, 665, 678, 702, 708, 715

    Gbaji War 37, 128, 386
    Gbaji Wars 19, 53, 61, 68, 73, 83, 87, 99, 125, 249, 313, 335, 337, 342, 344, 351, 361, 373, 389, 398, 408, 420, 422, 620, 673, 702, 714, 718, 720, 741

    (Sometimes a capital letter, sometimes not?)
    Dragonewt 71, 73, 74, 75, 76, 79, 80, 116, 134, 170, 183, 184, 523, 656
    dragonewts 8, 58, 59, 61, 69, 70, 71, 73, 74, 75, 76, 77, 79, 80, 91, 100, 108, 121, 126, 127, 128, 129, 131, 133, 135, 144, 166, 169, 171, 172, 182, 183, 184, 189, 191, 237, 241, 275, 277, 285, 286, 304, 350, 355, 385, 386, 389, 392, 521, 523, 640, 645, 693, 694, 696, 701, 706, 711, 712, 714, 716
    (Ditto dragon and Dragon but believe previously mentioned that).

    Dendulag Islands 498
    Dendulag Isles 497

    Colymar Black Spear 183, 237
    Colymar’s Black Spear 736

    The following Index entries might be combined in the Index:

    Amazon 435, 437, 743
    Amazons 271, 424, 431, 435, 437, 470, 744

    Anaxial 304, 309, 642, 665, 666, 669, 671, 673, 683, 684, 685
    Anaxial the Sailor 304, 309

    Andin 474, 476, 477, 479, 483, 492, 529, 535, 536
    Andins 470, 471, 474, 475, 477, 478, 480, 485, 492

    antigod 262, 267, 284, 285, 290, 425, 427, 474, 476, 478, 480, 482, 485, 490, 492, 493, 496, 691, 694, 696
    antigods 57, 152, 261, 267, 268, 280, 288, 426, 432, 470, 474, 475, 476, 477, 478, 482, 483, 490, 492, 493, 497, 529, 685, 687, 694, 695, 696, 744

    Arim 172, 178, 179, 188
    Arim the Pauper 172, 178, 179, 188

    Belintar 101, 121, 141, 142, 144, 167, 237, 239, 240, 241, 242, 243, 244, 245, 247, 248, 249, 251, 254, 255, 256, 257, 259, 339, 430, 465
    Belintar the God-King 239, 240, 248, 339
    Belintar the Stranger 141, 237, 247

    Black Hralf 200, 206, 230
    Black Hralf the Weasel 200, 206, 230

    broo 106, 107, 109, 329, 342, 344, 397, 443, 449, 456, 553, 613, 722, 736, 744
    broos 17, 59, 106, 107, 109, 153, 193, 202, 293, 342, 343, 344, 361, 393, 438, 444, 445, 456, 470, 574, 575, 581,

    Broyan 171, 177, 240, 241, 247, 249, 250, 259, 296, 298, 728, 729, 730, 735, 736, 738, 739
    Broyan the Liberator 249, 728
    Broyan the Vingkotling 249, 735

    centaur 106, 110, 171, 178, 179, 413
    centaurs 106, 134, 586, 640

    Croesia 206, 646
    Croesia the Moon Goddess 206

    demi-bird 73, 75, 726
    demi-birds 75, 706

    demigod 14, 15, 65, 130, 132, 168, 171, 182, 204, 218, 220, 259, 262, 267, 271, 296, 302, 307, 329, 330, 368, 407, 409, 429, 433, 459, 463, 474, 476, 478, 481, 485, 487, 490, 493, 496, 498, 526, 530, 540, 544, 551, 574, 575, 581, 586, 613, 631, 635, 705, 735, 738, 740, 744
    demigods 8, 17, 68, 121, 130, 137, 139, 145, 158, 159, 163, 164, 168, 189, 302, 318, 364, 403, 416, 421, 469, 474, 475, 477, 485, 498, 529, 536, 545, 598, 599, 627, 640, 650, 655, 664, 682, 683, 685, 706, 714, 728, 738

    Denegeria 309, 674
    Denegeria the Daughter 309

    Derik 444
    Derik Poljoni 444

    Doom Current 459, 460, 664
    Doom Currents 11, 458, 459, 463, 661

    Dragon Emperor 54, 57, 76, 121, 128, 131, 153, 167, 260, 261, 262, 263, 264, 265, 267, 268, 269, 271, 274, 275, 277, 278, 283, 284, 285, 286, 287, 693, 696, 743
    Dragon Emperors 57, 128, 152, 262, 277, 284, 696

    dryad 63, 67, 502, 602, 626, 710
    dryads 63, 65, 66, 230, 541, 600, 604, 710

    Endless Green 368, 372
    Endless Green Grasslands 368

    Exarch 54, 58, 264, 268, 271, 272, 277, 279, 282, 283, 291
    Exarchs 54, 260, 261, 264, 269, 271, 277, 278, 289, 743

    Eyebrow 449, 450
    Eyebrow peak 450

    Fazzur 12, 168, 169, 170, 171, 172, 177, 189, 240, 241, 247, 249, 329, 728, 729, 732
    Fazzur Wideread 12, 168, 169, 170, 171, 172, 177, 189, 240, 241, 247, 249, 329, 728, 729, 732

    Garangordos 43, 46, 47, 133, 551, 552, 553, 558, 564, 566, 571
    Garangordos the Cruel 43, 551, 571

    Garundyer 228, 387, 388, 393
    Garundyer of the Seven Storms 387, 393

    Gold Wheel Dancer 234
    Gold Wheel Dancers 189, 694, 705, 706, 711

    Great Troll 97
    Great Trolls 92

    griffin 673
    griffins 110, 198, 734

    Hahlgrim 329, 344, 698
    Hahlgrim Ironsword 329, 344

    Harantara 105, 153, 529, 531, 534, 536, 537, 690
    Harantara the Goddess of the Kahar Sea 531, 534

    Harmast 37, 123, 129, 131, 156, 199, 200, 216, 224, 235, 244, 249, 374, 388, 393, 394, 412, 666, 708, 711, 718, 739, 741
    Harmast Barefoot 37, 123, 129, 131, 156, 199, 249, 393, 394, 412, 708, 741

    Hensarava 474, 475, 479, 481, 485, 490, 536
    Hensarava the Golden Archer Prince 474, 479, 481, 485

    Hofstaring 168, 738
    Hofstaring Treeleaper 168, 738

    Hon-eel 15, 112, 151, 168, 169, 170, 171, 175, 177, 240, 294, 298, 299, 311, 314, 315, 316, 317, 318, 319, 335, 340, 368, 728, 747
    Hon-eel the Artess 15, 175, 177, 240, 298, 311, 315, 316

    Hwarin 151, 298, 319, 320, 321, 330, 331, 335, 338, 339, 340
    Hwarin Dalthippa 151, 298, 319, 320, 321, 330, 331, 335, 338, 339, 340

    Ingkot 330, 338
    Ingkot Axe-and-a-half 330

    Inner Circle 73, 386
    Inner Circle of Wisdom 73

    Iron Dwarf 83, 89, 90
    Iron Dwarves 83, 84, 86, 87, 185, 227, 464, 515, 519, 638

    Iverlanthus 666, 667
    Iverlanthus Swenithsson 666, 667

    Jack O’Bear 699
    Jack O’Bears 289, 699

    Jaldon 137, 185, 441, 443, 444, 451, 735
    Jaldon Goldentooth 185, 441, 444, 451, 735

    Jar-eel 14, 15, 175, 177, 299, 301, 302, 316, 317, 318, 329, 368, 441, 728, 736, 737, 739, 747, 748
    Jar-eel the Razoress 14, 15, 301, 302, 316, 317, 318, 368, 441, 728, 736, 737

    Jraktal 43, 46, 47, 551, 571, 621, 700
    Jraktal the Tap 43, 46, 47, 551, 571

    Kethaelan 239, 240, 285, 357, 427, 430, 464, 466, 736
    Kethaelans 356, 429

    krarshtkid 699
    krarshtkids 153, 456, 699

    Laraloori 477, 479, 485, 491
    Laraloori the She-Mother-Beauty-Goddess 485

    Lesser Hydra 544
    Lesser Hydras 185, 574

    mandarin 54, 57, 265, 271, 275
    mandarins 54, 57, 76, 153, 260, 261, 267, 268, 269, 271, 273, 285, 287, 288, 289, 290, 291, 743

    Markorth 718
    Markorth of Nochet 718

    megalith 496
    megaliths 348, 481, 496, 708

    Moon Boat 294, 301, 310
    Moon Boats 145, 200, 219, 222, 295, 310

    Naiad 103
    Naiads 103, 251

    newtling 108, 142, 438
    newtlings 59, 61, 108, 110, 241, 251, 350, 361, 444, 445, 640, 706

    nymph 66, 197
    nymphs 63, 66, 597, 634

    Opening 43, 46, 54, 142, 144, 145, 163, 208, 239, 249, 257, 258, 260, 268, 350, 411, 413, 421, 459, 463, 465, 466, 506, 509, 513, 525, 531, 558, 570, 602, 641
    Opening of the Seas 239, 249, 257, 350, 465, 466

    Palangio 129, 131, 156, 235, 352, 357, 374, 712, 716, 718
    Palangio the Iron Vrok 129, 131, 156, 235, 352, 357, 374, 712, 716

    Quicksilver Dwarf 83, 89
    Quicksilver Dwarves 84, 85

    Rikard 240, 241, 242, 247, 249, 256, 329
    Rikard the Tiger-Hearted 240, 241, 247, 249, 256, 329

    Sable Rider 27, 29, 440, 441
    Sable Riders 29, 30, 438, 440, 444, 451, 457

    Seshna 127, 131, 406, 407, 408, 409, 419, 527
    Seshna Likita 131, 407, 408, 419

    Shan Shan 19, 55, 109, 110, 150, 260, 264, 268, 281, 282, 283, 284, 437, 662, 679, 693
    Shan Shan Mountains 19, 55, 109, 110, 264, 282, 283, 284, 437, 693

    Silver Shields 340
    Silver Shields regiment 340

    smilodon 197
    smilodons 191

    Star Tribe 647, 708
    Star Tribes 708

    Surantyr 144, 379, 382, 384, 387, 388, 392, 393
    Surantyr the Non-Heretic 144, 379, 384, 387, 388, 392

    Sword and Helm 234, 244, 247, 249, 691, 728
    Sword and Helm of Vingkot 247, 728

    Teshnite 424, 426, 429, 430, 432, 435, 560
    Teshnites 283, 298, 425, 426

    thane 33, 34, 644, 647, 666, 667
    thanes 13, 33, 37, 170, 242, 698

    Thrice Blessed People 345
    Thrice Blessed Peoples 311

    Trader Prince 350, 352, 355, 356, 357, 361, 362
    Trader Princes 142, 167, 239, 242, 251, 350, 352, 353, 355, 356, 357, 361, 362, 383, 465

    trireme 248, 416, 464
    triremes 242, 249, 350, 406, 437, 465, 466, 654

    True Dragon 70, 77, 78, 79, 80, 133, 153, 170, 183, 185, 188, 261, 267, 285, 329, 398, 463, 641
    True Dragons 70, 74, 76, 77, 78, 79, 80,133, 153, 182, 237, 255, 278, 463, 706

    Tusk Rider 729
    Tusk Riders 13, 93, 94, 170, 175, 189, 375, 393

    Twinstar 313, 314, 646
    Twinstars 298, 644, 645, 646, 677

    Varganthar 199, 206
    Varganthar the Unconquerable 199, 206

    war elephant 430
    war elephants 45, 46, 562, 564

    White Bull secret society 441, 457, 734
    White Bull Society 440

    Woodland Judgment 631, 638
    Woodland Judgments 69, 620, 626, 630, 631, 634, 635, 638

    #7426
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    VOLUME 1

    Page 255
    – Kithma (small city): This heavily-fortified city is the capital of Thonble
    – Leskos (small city): This seaside city lies at the mouth of a steep ravine leading up to the Heortland Plateau and is surrounded by thousand-foot-high cliffs.

    Page 265
    – with a chop prominently displayed [what’s a chop?]
    – A bronze ritual cauldron (called a ding) is between the claimants. [phrase ‘is prominently displayed’ was just used]

    Page 273
    – and probably even more vehemently about who has to give the bad news to their superior

    Page 285
    – Yongmingcheng (small city): This heavily-fortified port city is lit day and night

    Page 294
    – Hundreds, perhaps thousands, of individuals comprise the court: his extended (and extensive) family of wives,

    Page 306
    – On his belt he carries mirrors, shears, and medallions.

    Page 309
    – This fertile land is the most densely-populated satrapy in the Empire.

    Page 312
    – Deneskerva the Great Sister is the demigod daughter of the Red Goddess.

    Page 315
    – In her right arm she holds a bundle of maize and in her left hand carries a bronze sickle dripping blood. [matches picture, and picture on p. 340]

    Page 320
    – Despite its size, she carries it in her right hand and a long spear with a blazing gold spearhead in her left.
    – Mirin’s Cross: This ancient and strategic city

    Page 322
    – The senior officers, using a manual they called The Twelve Commands, were flexible and efficient.

    Page 325
    – Aldog (small city): This small, heavily-fortified city

    Page 338
    – Hwarin Dalthippa began her second Daughter’s Road in Cafol, the old capital of Sylila, and it ran eastward
    – His most important daemon familiar, Karash’arll, follows. (This creature later appears as a Lunar slave of the dead.)

    Page 340
    – His gold jewelry sports Solar and Lunar motifs.
    – He wears an ornate tunic over his brightly-patterned wool skirt.

    Page 344
    – Hahlgrim is joined by his brother Oddi the Keen, a famous Uroxi berserk, and by Ketil Kingslayer, an Orlanthi holy man and slayer of King Eric.
    – In times past it has served as a sorcerer’s tower, an Arkati fort, a Vivamort refuge, and a palace for the Mad Sultan.

    Page 347
    – Second, over the shirt was placed a thick Coat of Safety, a gift from his own city (Raibanth).
    Eighth taken in his right hand was the Spear of Domination [bold it]

    Page 348
    – Mostal lost them on his errand from his workshop beneath the Spike to the Court of Acos
    – Thrice Blessed: The land of Eol is a taiga inhabited by reindeer-herding people

    Page 349
    – These are the Twenty-Seven Carvers
    – It is sometimes called Khordavu’s Script.
    – It is the only one which does not have a deity associated with it.

    RICK SEZ: Fixed.

    #7428
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    Index Issues

    Pillar 114, 117, 155, 262, 271, 294, 335, 372, 430, 644, 668, 723, 742
    I believe this should only refer to the ‘Pillar’ on pages 372, 644, 668, 723.

    Sartar 11, 12, 29, 31, 34, 35, 36, 70, 73, 74, 78, 79, 80, 120, 141, 144, 168, 169, 170, 171, 172, 174, 175, 177, 179, 182, 183, 184, 185, 187, 188, 189, 190, 229, 237, 239, 240, 241, 249, 255, 257, 259, 295, 296, 307, 329, 330, 331, 338, 339, 441, 444, 445, 449, 452, 454, 457, 651, 659, 704, 724, 728, 729, 730, 732, 733, 734, 736, 738, 740, 742, 747, 750
    This is a problem as this index entry picks up Sartar the prince/king and Sartar the land. Suggest there should be a new entry:
    Sartar (Hero) 12, 73, 78, 141, 169, 171, 172, 174, 177, 179, 182, 183, 185, 188, 259, 441, 452, 651, 659, 704, 738
    The land entry becomes:
    Sartar 11, 29, 31, 34, 35, 36, 70, 74, 79, 80, 120, 144, 168, 169, 170, 171, 172, 175, 177, 179, 182, 183, 184, 185, 187, 188, 189, 190, 229, 237, 239, 240, 241, 249, 255, 257, 259, 295, 296, 307, 329, 330, 331, 338, 339, 441, 444, 445, 449, 452, 457, 659, 724, 728, 729, 730, 732, 733, 734, 736, 738, 740, 742, 747, 750

    Temple 14, 17, 25, 45, 58, 62, 66, 70, 79, 80, 93, 100, 119, 124, 141, 170, 175, 177, 179, 183, 184, 185, 187, 188, 189, 190, 203, 205, 211, 221, 228, 236, 240, 249, 251, 255, 256, 257, 271, 275, 278, 279, 280, 283, 284, 285, 297, 304, 306, 307, 311, 313, 315, 316, 318, 321, 324, 325, 327, 329, 330, 334, 335, 337, 338, 339, 340, 342, 347, 348, 361, 362, 373, 383, 385, 388, 393, 397, 407, 409, 415, 419, 427, 429, 431, 432, 433, 437, 439, 456, 479, 481, 510, 534, 535, 537, 553, 564, 601, 631, 635, 656, 697, 708, 717, 721, 722, 729, 730, 732, 735, 738, 740
    This should only refer to the place name ‘Temple’ on pages 407, 409.

    The Islands 242, 248, 469, 477
    This should only refer to the area of the Holy Country on pages 242, 248.

    Workers 16, 38, 51, 52, 101, 672
    This should only refer to the Western Caste on pages 51, 52? [Suspect this means I’d better check the other castes].

    Zoo 259, 292, 639, 704
    This should only relate to the place name ‘Zoo’ on page 259.

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    VOLUME 1

    Page 361
    – A small population of ascetic wizard-priests, noted for their spiritual discipline, lives off the pilgrim trade.

    Page 372
    – One leads upward to the Surface World, the other leads upward to the Underworld. [should this be ‘downward to the Underworld.’?]

    Page 373
    – Ehilm the Sun God, the son of Lodik;

    Page 376
    – which lie next to tightly-knit living quarters traversed by a bewildering network of streets

    Page 378
    – She wears an ornate red and white takchita with an sumptuous headdress and masses of gold and silver jewelry, semiprecious stones, bracelets, and necklaces.
    – In his belt sash is a wickedly-curved dagger.

    Page 382
    – thereby losing the trust of all right-thinking lords and all other people
    – recently financed the construction of Zorakarkat, a temple-fort dedicated to the Chaos-killer

    Page 383
    Its courageous horsemen regularly plunge into any surrounding territory for plunder and sport

    Page 384
    – Near Lartuli is the battlefield of Irn, where many Ralian demigods fought and bled in the Gods Age.

    Page 385
    – These games include group contests, where bands of heavily-armored nobles charge against each other

    Page 393
    – After defeating several waves of trollkin, thousands of trolls and Darkness demons bubbled up from beneath the earth

    Page 394
    – which possessed an unfortunate mortal that had tried to command it.

    Page 395
    – Halikiv: This troll land, roadless and cut by rugged valleys

    RICK SEZ: Fixed.

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    Page 666: “Iverlanthus’ Commentary
    Iverlanthus Swenithsson was a learned sage of Lhankor Mhy from Talastar (some claim from the Bilini, others say from Anadiki). In 1592, he traveled to the Gods Wall with the support of Varnarn of Elz Ast. Iverlanthus shocked his erstwhile patrons with his commentary on the Gods Wall, which was circulated around the scholarly community of Lakrene and Dara- ni in 1595. Iverlanthus went on to become a Knowing Companion to King Hrodar Grizzlebeak and was killed by a thane of King Eric Norallsson in 1605.”

    Repeated in the sidebar on page 667

    Page 671: “I-24. Ourania
    Goddess of the Sky and Heavens. One eye has a tear dripping, the other is surrounded by a twinkle. She is also called Star 3.
    I-25. Oropum
    Goddess of Guidance, her star is one which was first known to the Yuthuppan star gazers. She is also called Star 4, Evandal, the Porridge Star, Thilla, and Mother of Yuthuppa.”

    The numbering of the figures on page 670 stops at 23.

    RICK SEZ: Fixed numbering.

    #7438
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    Index Issues

    Crater 13, 141, 296, 307, 317, 318, 338, 596, 613, 646, 681, 684
    This should only refer to the place name ‘Crater’ in the Lunar Empire, not the ones on pages 596, 613, 646, 681, 684.

    Creation 21, 78, 113, 123, 141, 154, 203, 264, 373, 497, 529, 620, 659, 665, 678, 680, 697, 728, 734, 750
    This probably should not include pages 264, 659, 728, 734, 750.

    Deep 97, 102, 104, 144, 234, 243, 251, 254, 258, 275, 397, 430, 453, 458, 459, 461, 466, 487, 519, 544, 622, 627, 631, 639, 657, 681, 687, 739, 750
    Should only refer to the place name Deep pages 251, 254, 458, 461, 681, 687.

    Footprint 177, 234, 235, 247, 251, 255, 258, 729, 736
    Larnste’s Footprint 234, 251, 255, 258, 729, 736
    These two might be combined (probably not worth doing).

    Furthest 12, 168, 175, 184, 185, 189, 240, 292, 310, 328, 339, 602, 738, 742
    Entry on page 602 does not refer to the city of Furthest and should be removed.

    Hinter 490, 528, 531, 534, 535, 536, 537
    Hinter Islands 490, 531, 535
    These two might be combined as they capture all references to the Hinter Islands/Hinter Isles.

    Imperial (language of Vormain) 12, 26, 38, 55, 57, 117, 132, 133, 135, 137, 138, 168, 170, 171, 175, 189, 208, 211, 264, 275, 279, 285, 294, 295, 296, 299, 301, 302, 306, 310, 313, 316, 318, 324, 329, 331, 335, 344, 409, 412, 413, 419, 421, 466, 486, 487, 490, 528, 529, 530, 531, 534, 535, 536, 537, 551, 570, 668, 715, 721, 723, 727, 734
    This picks up every usage of ‘Imperial’. The language is referred to only on pages 55, 528.
    There might be a new entry
    Imperial (coin) 12.

    Mask 197, 290, 302, 309, 312, 314, 318, 325, 386, 456, 748
    Should only refer to the Mask of the Red Emperor and Great Sister on pages 295 (Masks), 302, 309, 312, 314, 318, 325, 748.
    It might be work considering splitting there into Mask (Red Emperor) and Mask (Great Sister).
    There might be another entry Mask (of Tada) 456

    Nest 108, 190, 427, 680, 706, 726
    Should probably only refer to the Newtling ‘Nest’ on page 108.

    These might be combined (only way to find all instances was to use the variants of the name/title):
    Terthinus 90, 104, 138, 144, 459, 466, 500, 622, 627, 631, 639
    Terthinus the Voice of the Deep 104, 459
    Voice of the Deep 104, 144, 459, 466, 622, 627, 631, 639

    #7442
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    Martin Helsdon
    Spectator

    Index Issues

    Ban 51, 99, 141, 144, 145, 200, 201, 202, 203, 205, 206, 208, 211, 212, 215, 216, 218, 219, 220, 221, 222, 224, 225, 227, 228, 230, 232, 233, 277, 298, 301, 316, 318, 324, 325, 327, 747
    The following is not related to the (Syndics) Ban and should be removed: 277 (Ban Yow).

    There may be a benefit in merging Ban with Syndics Ban:
    Syndics Ban 51, 99, 141, 144, 145, 200, 201, 202, 203, 215, 219, 220, 225, 228, 230, 233, 298, 316, 318, 324, 325, 327

    These might be combined, but it’s probably best to keep them as is:
    Closed 78, 142, 157, 264, 275, 287, 410
    Closing 47, 48, 104, 137, 138, 139, 142, 143, 145, 200, 202, 205, 208, 227, 237, 248, 258, 261, 264, 272, 351, 352, 375, 406, 410, 411, 415, 427, 437, 455, 459, 460, 463, 465, 466, 469, 471, 475, 498, 501, 502, 506, 511, 512, 513, 516, 523, 525, 526, 527, 531, 548, 551, 552, 553, 564, 566, 567, 570, 571, 601, 602, 603, 607, 620, 627, 639, 642, 647
    Closing of the Oceans 137, 527, 642

    These might be combined, but it’s probably best to keep them as is:
    Opening 43, 46, 54, 142, 144, 145, 163, 208, 239, 249, 257, 258, 260, 268, 350, 411, 413, 421, 459, 463, 465, 466, 506, 509, 513, 525, 531, 558, 570, 602, 641
    Opening of the Seas 239, 249, 257, 350, 465, 466

    However, an instance of ‘Open’ related to the Opening is not indexed: page 482.
    Ditto ‘Opened’ on page 142, 145, 249 – but don’t matter as ‘Opening’ on those pages is indexed.
    ‘Opened the Seas’ on page 353 is not indexed, and should perhaps come under one or the other.
    Instance of ‘Opening’ on page 163 is indexed by ‘Opening’ but does not refer to THE Opening and should be removed.

    ‘Opening of the Oceans’ appears on pages 144, 525. May be desirable to alter to Seas?
    ‘Opening of Ocean’ appears on page 144.
    ‘Opening of the seas’ appears on page 43 and might be ‘Opening of the Seas’.

    #7444
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    Zachary Kline
    Spectator

    Page 158.

    “Eurmal was at born at…” Should probably be “Eurmal was born at…”

    Page 159. “beyond reach the reach…” should probably be “beyond the reach.”

    RICK SEZ: Fixed.

    #7449

    The Aldryami

    P. 66: Elder Wilds: “The Great Tree of the Elder Wilds was rooted on the northernmost [side] of the Bear Hills, … “

    Dragonewts

    P.76: The Dragonewt Roads: “Dragonewts enter the [roads] only in special magical sites… ” “Outside of the [roads], but nearby, passage along the [road] is noticeable.” “When a road is broken, any [dragonewt] […] can enter [it] from a functioning site, and when [the dragonewt reaches] the broken end [it] simply [re-enters] the world … ”  “Thus some [dragonewt] roads are one-way to their end.”

    P. 76: Dragon Pass: “… [five] smaller cities, and many smaller “nests”. ” Cf. p. 183.

    P. 76: Ralios: “A dragonewt colony was founded by [the] Dragon’s Eye in the First Age.”

    Dragons

    P. 80: “Triceratops, [Monoceros], etc.: sexuality.” (Monocerous is an adjective not a noun.)

    #7450
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    Ville Bergholm
    Spectator

    127: 265 ST map: ESROLVULI -> ESROVULI?

    Holy Country
    ============

    241: left col: “army led by the Feathered Horse Queen, raids” -> “army, led by the Feathered Horse Queen, raids” (add comma)
    243: left col, last para: teaming -> teeming
    map: Thomble (Thonble in text)
    244: middle col, third para: “Esrolians are matriarchies” -> “Esrolian clans/families are matriarchies”?
    Goddess box: Ty Kora Tek has runes of Darkness and Death, is this correct? No Dark Earth, Fate?
    Asrelia seems to be missing Luck.
    245: left col, first para: “is the trolls” -> “are the trolls”
    right col, first para: gouges -> gorges?
    246: map: “Stormwalk Mountains” -> “Storm Mountains”
    247: left col, second para: “In the Second and early Third Ages”: The historical map on p. 130 claims that Hendrikings already lived here around 400 ST.
    249: left col, fourth para: “and he originally climbed” -> “as he originally climbed”
    250: picture text: “Esrolian Grandmother:” should be bolded.
    254: right col: Exile Fort (Exile Stead in maps)
    257: middle col, second para: “massive statute” -> “massive statue”

    349: Dara Happan Sacred Alphabet, first para: “used these” -> “used it”?

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