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    Pg 742 – 744. Several of the plates referenced in the text do not appear to be there. Text references plates 30-40 inclusive, but only plates 30,34, 36, 38, 40 appear. If this is intentional, it should be at least explained better in the text, as it is confusing.

    Jeff Sez: The Cryptic Verses are a series of 42 allegorical drawings or plates, the details of which only 30 through 40 7 are known. The images of only 7 plates are shown – I don’t think we need to explain that only those plates that are depicted are depicted.

    #7308
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    Page 751, column 1: “Middle-Earth” -> “Middle-earth”

    Page 751, column 1: “Good fantasy is not just variations on Frodo’s Quest or reimagining of the War of the Roses” -> either “reimaginings” or “a reimagining”.

    Page 751, column 2: “the Great Mystery; those riddles” -> “the Great Mystery, those riddles”

    Page 751, column 3: “breathe” -> “breath”

    RICK SEZ: Fixed.

    #7309
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    Florent HEULIN
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    Page 7 on the Map we have “Neleomi Sea” which harkens back to the old days when “Neliomi Sea” is correct

    Page 126 Map at Dawn: “Hyalorong” ?; it should be “Hyalorings”

    Page 365 Population of Pent Box: Total is 919,000 not 929,000.

    RICK SEZ: Page 365 fixed. Others are variants.

    #7312
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    Page 744: Dawning sacrificial sun illumined monster king adore, Splintered sky and shattered earth evermore.

    Suggest new line after the comma to follow presentation of the other verses.

    RICK SEZ: Fixed.

    #7313
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    Florent HEULIN
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    Page 698: I find it a little confusing to have “Broo” (singular) as a title when other chaotic creatures are plural, so “Broos”.

    And by the way, on pages 106 (description & margin), 107 (twice), 342, 397, 449, 613, 701, 736 (margin), and 745 it should be “Broos” not “Broo”
    But in the end if both spellings are correct, no need to worry?

    RICK SEZ: no need to worry.

    #7314
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    Florent HEULIN
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    Page 702: “Pochargno” should be “Pocharngo” (Mutator’s Trick?)

    RICK SEZ: Fixed. (although to be honest it would be appropriately funny to leave it as a typo)

    #7315
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    Florent HEULIN
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    Page 705 Second and third paragraphs are repeated twice (happy layout…)

    RICK SEZ: dupes deleted and new text in intro as replacement.

    #7316
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    “Page 666: footnotes 12 and 13 should be swapped.” since the person can’t post here, I’m doing it instead.

    RICK SEZ: Fixed.

    #7319
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    Florent HEULIN
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    Page 718: “Harmastings meet their father, Harmast, and are killed [in their sleep by their own brother Veribur]. Harmast cannot order the death of his son, but sends him into permanent exile.”
    IMO, to add those few words [***] helps understanding what it is all about.

    Page 719: “So sometimes when you hear that Arkat did this or that, it is really
    his companion”.

    Page 722: “Nysalor is defended by his enemies” (?) allies

    RICK SEZ: Fixed all 3.

    #7320
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    On page 667, first paragraph, the name “Mathanatork” probably deserves a footnote of explanation [was he the Jrusteli guy?], as maybe also Vastolf, in paragraph 6 (since it might be good to provide a historical context for his heroquest?… ah, reading on I see his heroquest is no longer referenced…

    …in which case, in the final paragraph in column 2, it might be worth contextualising with the phrase, “those who have followed Orlanthus”, to, “those who have followed Orlanthus on the Path of the Three Blows to the contest in the Golden Hall”, or something like that…, and similarly, “others bore witness from beyond”, to, “others who bore witness from beyond the dais of the throne Yelm” … and lastly, for clarity, adding “others” again at the end of the phrase, so that…

    …the whole thing (page 667 final paragraph column 2) would now read something like (also adding, “who”, a semi-colon, and a bit more punctuation), “Nor is the number of gods of any cosmological import, since those who have followed Orlanthus on the Path of the Three Blows to the contest in the Golden Hall, and who recall this place, have attested that others bore witness from beyond the dais of the throne Yelm; and presumably, therefore, these others, since they were not gathered in the conclave of Mutharmus, are not shown on the monument.”)

    = = =

    Jonathan

    #7321
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    Florent HEULIN
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    Page 666:
    Footnote 11 that will become #14 is for “the Hero Vastolf”
    Footnote 14 is in fact #11 and belongs to “Likstrandros”
    For footnotes 12 and 13 other guys have already checked the error.

    RICK SEZ: Fixed.

    #7323
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    p. 148: the Orlanth and Magasta boxes are missing periods.

    p. 722:
    * “He is iconographical similar” -> “He is iconographically similar”
    * To make the sentence beginning “Note his third eye” easier to parse, I suggest changing “his halo” to “halo”.
    (Awesome graphic, by the way.)

    p. 575, 581, 586, 613: Probably not something you want to change?, but the phrase “Agitori (the original demigod race, kin of the Ancestors, who did not drink water and thus retained immortality)” is repeated every time the term is used (four times).

    RICK SEZ: fixed 148 and 722. Repeats are fine, since people won’t usually be reading the whole book, or section.

    #7324
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    jonathan quaife
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    Page 7, column 2, paragraph 1: “Similarly”, rather than, “Similar”…

    RICK SEZ: Fixed.

    #7326
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    jonathan quaife
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    Page 8, col 1, para 4: “called merfolk by humanITY” would be more consistent with previous.

    RICK SEZ: Fixed.

    #7327
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    jonathan quaife
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    Page 9, col 1, para 5… “injury IN Glorantha” (rather than “on”?)

    RICK SEZ: Fixed.

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