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  • #6995
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    Charles
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    Oops, good spot, Peter / How did I miss that?

    In that case

    Page 553: Bepalafio (small city)

    The city name is not in italics for the second instance of Bepalafio.

    #6996
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    Jonathan Geere
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    No doubt all in hand but the Christmas edition finishes on Page 346 whilst the Presidential issue starts on Page 350

    #7000
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    Jonathan Geere
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    Page 361. in the Place of Interest section:
    Pelushi: This small tribe lives around Pelushi Volcano,
    Should be talk about the place, hence:
    Pelushi: A small tribe lives around Pelushi Volcano,

    Similarly: Page 357
    Dokoli: This tribe occupies the Azure River Valley and Doskolion Hills.
    This is a tribe not a place. Also Doskolion Hills does not appear to be on the map (or at least near the Azure River). Also Page 362 has “Storm Mountain: This solitary mountain
    rises above the Doskolion Hills.” also does not appear to be on the map near Azure River.

    #7004
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    Charles
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    Page 566: Siwah El (large city): This city’s ruler is a sorceress, unusual in the maledominated politics of Afadjann.

    Maledominated – Missing space or hyphen?

    #7005
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    Martin Helsdon
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    Quote:
    Maledominated – Missing space or hyphen?

    Looking at an earlier Word version: a hyphen. It looks as though hyphens were stripped out somehow during the transfer; have just tried porting the pdf into text to allow a spelling check, but unfortunately the hyphens that are present in the pdf get stripped out as well.
    8-(

    #7006
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    Martin Helsdon
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    [Apologies if any of these have been reported before.]

      Page 373: ‘that instinct is neither good not evil’ should be ‘that instinct is neither good nor evil’.
      Page 392: ‘It kep close ties to Dragon Pass’ should be ‘It kept close ties to Dragon Pass’.
      Page 400: ‘earings’ should be ‘earrings’.
      Page 400: ‘lotus blossum’ should be ‘lotus blossom’.
      Page 462: ‘commerical’ should be ‘commercial’.
      Page 463: ‘artfacts’ should be ‘artifacts’.
      Page 498: ‘diamondwarf’ usually ‘diamond dwarf’?
      Page 508: ‘fortifications.Rebellions’ should be ‘fortifications. Rebellions’.
      Page 515: ‘so on.They have’ should be ‘so on. They have’.
    #7008
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    Martin Helsdon
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    [Apologies if any of these have been reported before.]

    The following should have hyphens or spaces:

      Page 571 ageold should be age-old
      Page 431: Amazonwarleader should be Amazon warleader
      Page 635: antiAfadjanni should be anti-Afadjanni
      Page 497: armspan might be arm-span
      Page 599: blueskinned should be blue-skinned
      Page 590: brightlycolored should be brightly-colored
      Page 470: brightlydecorated should be brightly decorated
      Pages 498, 523: brownskinned should be brown-skinned
      Page 549: citystate should be city-state
      Page 517: clanvillage should be clan village
      Page 512: countersiege might be counter-siege
      Page 609: crocodileinfested should be crocodile-infested
      Page 465: deepsea should be deep sea
      Pages 456, 519, 595: doublehulled should be double-hulled
      Page 617: drugridden should be drug-ridden
      Page 529: dryland should be dry land
      Page 512: earthbased should be either earth-based or earth based
      Page 599: earthfilled should be earth-filled
      Pages 595 (multiple instances), 600 (twice): Elamleata should be Elame-ata? The latter occurs at least once.
      Page 596: Elamleata’s should be Elamle-ata’s
      Page 616: elfled should be elf-led
      Page 567: fairskinned should be fair-skinned
      Page 582: faroff should be far-off
      Page 609: farranging should be far-ranging
      Page 440: footbound should be foot-bound
      Page 631: fullyqualified should be fully qualified
      Page 523: ghostships should be ghost ships
      Page 538: goldcrowned should be gold-crowned
      Page 512: GoldenDiamondDwarf might be Golden Diamond Dwarf or Golden-Diamond-Dwarf
      Page 570 grasstype should be grass-type but more likely to be grass-like
      Page 507: greatgrandmother should be great-grandmother
      Page 544: highlypaid should be highly paid
      Page 460: highprowed should be high-prowed
      Page 507: islandwide should be island-wide
      Page 602: jungledwelling should be jungle-dwelling
      Page 594: kinbased should be kin-based
      Page 566: knocktogethers should be knock-togethers
      Page 455: krillrich should be krill-rich
      Page 600: lifesized should be life-sized
      Page 465: littleknown should be little-known
      Page 577: longburning should be long burning
      Page 460: longdead should be long dead
      Page 509: longextinct should be long extinct
      Page 472: lowlying should be low-lying
      Page 566: maledominated should be male dominated
      Page 596: maneating should be man-eating
      Page 570: manytrunked should be many-trunked
      Page 465: mediumsized should be medium-sized
      Pages 553, 618, 622: merking should be mer-king
      Page 570 (twice): middleaged should be middle-aged
      Page 474: monkeyherders should be monkey-herders
      Page 523: monsterfilled should be monster-filled
      Page 604: monsterinhabited should be monster-inhabited
      Page 614: moreorless should be more or less
      Page 576: motherinlaw should be mother-in-law
      Page 547: nearforgotten should be near-forgotten
      Page 498: newlyopened should be newly opened
      Page 599: ninetytwo should be ninety-two
      Page 570: nonChaotic should probably be non-Chaotic
      Page 544: nonslaves should be non-slaves
      Page 437: oddlyshaped should be oddly-shaped
      Page 599: oneroom should be one-room
      Page 507: pseudomoieties should be pseudo-moieties
      Page 570: righthand should be right-hand
      Page 541: roundtopped should be round-topped
      Page 599: saltstrewn should be salt strewn or salt-strewn
      Page 466, 602: saucerlike should be saucer-like
      Page 582: SeesatNight might be Sees-at-Night
      Pages 547, 616: selfstyled should be self-styled
      Page 594: semiindependent should be semi-independent
      Page 540: SevenConqueror – might this be Seven Conqueror? Possibly not.
      Page 527: shapechanging should be shape-changing
      Page 592: sharppeaked should be sharp-peaked
      Page 465: smallsized should be small-sized
      Pages 465, 571: socalled should be so-called
      Page 546: statesupported should be state-supported
      Page 617: stormworshiping should be storm-worshipping
      Page 437: threebladed might be three-bladed or three bladed
      Page 523: Treecovered should be Tree-covered
      Page 527: twentysix should be twenty-six
      Page 600: twopound should be two pound
      Page 618: violetskinned should be violet-skinned
      Page 530: wellarmed should be well-armed
      Page 512: wellknown should be well known
      Page 511: welltrained should be well trained
      Page 465: widelyknown should be widely known
      Page 507: worldshaking should be world-shaking
      Pages 570, 593: yearround should be year-round
      Page 497: yellowskinned, blackhaired should be yellow-skinned, black-haired
    #7009
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    Charles
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    Quote:
    Quote from Martin Helsdon on March 1, 2014, 21:53
    The following should have hyphens or spaces:

    We’re not worthy 😉

    Seriously impressed….

    #7010
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    Martin Helsdon
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    Repeating the same exercise for the first half of Volume 1, believe the following are outstanding:

      Page 16: ‘Thet are likely to be a’ should be ‘They are likely to be a’
      Page 54: ‘engineered by skillfull’ should be ‘engineered by skilful’
      Page 93: ‘to prefer haunching their shoulders’ should be ‘to prefer hunching their shoulders’
      Page 98: ‘50 degrees fahrenheit’ should be ‘50 degrees Fahrenheit’

    Checking for missing spaces/dashes:

      Page 63: barklike should be bark-like
      Page 119: barleystalk should barley stalk
      Page 151 (twice): coldblooded should be cold-blooded
      Page 145: doomladen should be doom-laden
      Page 103: hindparts should be hind parts
      Page 84: protodwarf might be proto-dwarf
    #7012
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    Jonathan Geere
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    Quote:
    Quote from Martin Helsdon on March 2, 2014, 19:32
    Page 93: ‘to prefer haunching their shoulders’ should be ‘to prefer haunching their shoulders’[/list]

    Another awesome bit of error-trapping. But should be…
    hunching?

    #7013
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    Martin Helsdon
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    Quote:
    Another awesome bit of error-trapping. But should be…
    hunching?

    Correct. Didn’t copy-and-paste from the correct file. 8-|

    Proofreading too many documents…

    #7018
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    Martin Helsdon
    Spectator

    [GtG-p1-660]

      Page 256 side bar: crystalized should be crystallized
      Page 227: firebringer should be fire-bringer
      Pages 239, 248: merchief – compare with mer-king Pages 138, 462, 635
      Page 239: merqueen – compare with mer-king Pages 138, 462, 635
      Pages 553, 618, 622: merking – but mer-king Pages 138, 462, 635 [merking

    looks wrong]
    Pages 198, 342, 592: snowcapped should be snow-capped [snow-capped on Pages 290, 292]

    #7023
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    Charles
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    Apologies if I’ve duplicated some of my own earlier reports, never mind anyone else’s. I’m doing the checking during my commute time and the synchronisation with my PC looks a bit messed up.

    Page 527: The best documented visitor to Vormain was Handal Faarman, a God Learner surnamed “The Invisible Tanisorian”, who sent carrier pigeons out every dawn for twentysix days, and succumbed to some unknown fate.

    Twentysix – missing space or -?

    Page 524: Their ancestral entities were the Joserui, now worshiped as the gods of Vormain.

    The zenshin assist the Emperor in serving and administering the Joserui (the gods and spirits of Vormain).

    The Joserui are the celestial gods of Vormain, and ancestors of the Vormaino.

    Repetition on the same page?

    Page 566: Siwah El (large city): This city’s ruler is a sorceress, unusual in the maledominated politics of Afadjann.

    maledominated – missing space or hyphen?

    Page 570: All nonChaotic intelligent natives are Doraddi humans, with the exception of a number of Hsunchen tribes and a large dwarf population under the Mari Mountains.

    nonChaotic – missing space or hyphen?

    Page 571: The Second Age saw the invasion of the Six Legged Empire, socalled because the men rode horses.

    socalled – missing space or hyphen?

    Page 571: Barinso: This rich river valley is widely traveled by clans following ageold seasonal migrations.

    ageold – missing space or hyphen?

    Page 576: Pamalt’s motherinlaw first learned to scold here, so sometimes it is called “Where Men Keep Moving”.

    motherinlaw – missing space or hyphen?

    Page 576: Parts of the Nargan are infested with horrible Chaos monsters, such as solitary monster broos, far larger and more twisted than the breed found elsewhere.

    breeds?

    Pages 571, 576 & 582:
    – Estere: Called “Warnings Land,” these arid plains are occasionally inhabited by bands of Agitori (the original demigod race, kin of the Ancestors, who did not drink water and thus retained immortality). These oversized superhumans live along a stretch of dangerous territory along the northern edge of the Nargan Desert to keep its monsters in, and puny humans from the north out. These days they warn humans against the strange creatures that have begun to emerge over the last century: monsters that are parts of the deadly creatures of the Nargan, including living fire.

    – R’sfard Ayfo: Called “Sprinter’s Patrol,” these arid plains are occasionally inhabited by bands of Agitori (the original demigod race, kin of the Ancestors, who did not drink water and thus retained immortality). These oversized superhumans live along a stretch of dangerous territory along the northern edge of the Nargan Desert to keep its monsters in, and puny humans from the north out. These days they warn humans against the strange creatures that have begun to emerge over the last century: monsters that are parts of the deadly creatures oftheNargan,includinglivingfire.

    – Zamantak So: Called “Where Ancestors Roam,” these arid plains are occasionally inhabited by bands of Agitori (the original demigod race, kin of the Ancestors, who did not drink water and thus retained immortality). These oversized superhumans live along a stretch of dangerous territory along the northern edge of the Nargan Desert to keep its monsters in, and puny humans from the north out. These days they warn humans against the strange creatures that have begun to emerge over the last century: monsters that are parts of the deadly creatures of the Nargan, including living fire.

    1: Entries are near duplicates ( may be deliberate? )
    2: oftheNargan,includinglivingfire. Many missing spaces

    Page 582: Tarangolnin Olon (SeesatNight Bead): This bead can replace a normal eye and provide the wearer with sight even when no source of light is present.

    SeesatNight – missing spaces?

    Page 583: The Basmoli claim that in the God Time their god marched northward with a horde of followers, and they still patiently await his triumphant return.

    Is the term ‘their god’ appropriate here?

    Page 584: Thus, we know some general facts, and a few specifics, but rely mostly upon thirdhand information from the Doraddi storytellers.

    thirdhand – missing space?

    #7024
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    Jonathan Geere
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    To add to CC’s perceptive Spot Hidden repeated text:

    Page 609. Under MonBu:
    ….These oversized superhumans live along a stretch of dangerous territory along the northern edge of the Nargan Desert to keep its monsters in, and puny humans from the north out. These days they warn humans against the strange creatures that have begun to emerge over the last century: monsters that are parts of the deadly creatures of the Nargan, including living fire.

    The fourth repeat!!

    #7025
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    Scott Martin
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    Quote:
    Quote from Jonathan Geere on March 5, 2014, 06:37
    The fourth repeat!!

    I didn’t mind the multiple Agitori so much because I expect to use the Guide as a reference and so welcome a little duplication across entries.

    But since we’re here, that “monsters that are parts of the deadly creatures” line may benefit from a little smoothing. Are the monsters here actual portions of some larger and more horrible things of the Nargan, on the model of Praxian “parts of the Bull?”

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